IELTS Sample Reports of Band 7
Here you can find IELTS Sample Reports of Band 7, written by students and graded by IELTS teacher.
The topic of report appears when you hold mouse over the link. Every report is checked, marked, has comments and suggestions. Hold the mouse over underlined words in blue to see suggested corrections. Teacher’s summary is at the bottom of each report.IELTS Report, topic: Table of home schooled students percentages
You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.
The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry in 1999-2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
You should write at least 150 words.
he main trend is that all grades including kindergarten is growing for every year. Kindergarten started highest at 2.4 and ended highest at 2.9 percent with a constant increase. But grades 1-2 and grades 5-6 shows a little different trend, both starts at 1,5 percent in 1999 and declines a little bit in 2000. Both of them increased slowly in 2002 and both it holds that course to 2004 where grades 1-2 ends at 2,1 percent and grades 5-6 ends at 2.6 percent.
Grades 3-4 has a slow but steady growth througt all six years. It starts at 1.6 percent in 1999 and increases 0.1 every year except in 2003 when it peaks up 0.2 percent. Grades 7-8 starts at 1.6 percent and stays there for three years until it rapidly rises up to 2.2 and peaks at 2.5 in 2004.
Overall, all grades including kindergarten has had a rise at rougly minimum 1 percent and more in 6 years.
This is a good report; here is how you can make it better: the coherence needs improvement, meaning the logical connection between sentences inside a paragraph and between paragraphs. Use more connective words (Furthermore, However, etc).
The groupings you’ve done are fine, but try to use more variations describing those statistics: use words such as numbers, figures, percentages, etc. The grammar and the spelling need some extra attention.
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